The phoenix engulfs itself in a blaze
before its progeny rises from ash.
Some things burn to the bottom of always,
500 years disappear in a flash.
Beneath burning flames a beak, with panache
rips through its shell beneath smoldering oak.
Scarlet bright wings stretch out wide against ash
as it twists and twines through spiraling smoke
riding currents of myth immortality woke.
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Shout out to Magpie Tales for the inspiration I took from the word fire. I wanted to try a new form this week, so I searched until I found the Spenserian stanza:
The Spenserian stanza, the invention of Edmund Spenser, consists of nine lines, the first eight iambic pentamenter, the ninth iambic hexameter (twelve syllables) rhyming ababbcbcc.
25 comments:
Well done Brenda, I must give this form a shot.
I was hoping you would, Rall. Let me know when you've penned something!
Nicely done!
DAMMM! I wuz just getting to be able to follow the first four rules of MAGPIE...and now you're throwing iambic pentameter stuff around here--grin! Actually I LOVE form--classical musician--but have trouble putting words into it.
Beautifully done post, Brenda
Had to look at this after seeing your comment to Rall. Super poem! I love the mystical subject. Great take from the image.
Thanks Oodozo!
Steveroni, Interesting that you compare poetic form with musical form. I like the comparison. Thanks for stopping by!
Derrick--I'm glad you like the piece!
great poem! I've always loved the Phoenix.
Great post! A very enjoyable read and a wonderful take on the prompt!
-Weasel
my hat off to you
Not an easy task ... you managed it beautifully!
Brenda W. I love this piece your words and images are wonderful... I do love myth and your did an exquisite job of protraying the phoenix here...bkm
Well done! I love the phoenix approach.
Nice taking it that one step more and challenging yourself with a new form, Brenda... the lyrics of Sinead O'Connor' "Troy", "the phoenix from the flame" is now ringing through my ears...
- Dina
The amazing Phoenix bird always rises from the ashes and he's usually hotter than . . .
At least the one 80 miles from me!
Beautifully written, Brenda
I am impressed! The phoenix was a childhood fascination of mine. Absolutely brilliant poem.
Magical, beautifully written. :)
Fun form and great imagery. great fan of using the word panache! Awesome!
That firey phoenix...you've portrayed him beautifully here!
oh wonderful form...have never tried this one..loved the imagery of the pheonix as well...nice magpie!
Thank you to everyone for your comments. This was a fun piece to write, it took some time, but I like the results, too.
Your kind words make a difference in my day, thanks again!
Terrific form! The Phoenix is my favorite myth and you've surely written a great read!
Ah, the fascinating phoenix in a fabulous form! Felicitations!
Great poem. I didn't know they all had names for their forms. You learn something new every day.
LOVED the wordplay here! Was totally reminded of the Harry Potter series - myth fused with reality.
I had once written a piece (very prosaic ofcourse) on somewhat similar lines..
Thoroughly enjoyed your poem!
what a joy to read!
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