A mantra for a woman who searches for exclusive love
ends her rumination on a haunting and abusive love.
Enveloped in a fuselage of unintended loss
she can’t escape the dark mirage of bleak intrusive love.
Words in chant when uttered, beneath a star-dropped sky
tease open unfluttered, her soul’s reclusive love.
Syllables will congregate and carry a command
to seep through hearts and generate an unobtrusive love.
In profile on Match.com, Caw chanted as she typed
“Internet Yenta, catch me a catch of mutually effusive love.”
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The ghazal is a poetic form with roots in 7th century Arabia. The last stanza should reference the poet. It was interesting to go there. And yes, I met my husband on Match.com. We will be married six years on July 31. It worked for us! A shout out to Sunday Scribblings for the mantra prompt, and to Robert Lee Brewer at Poetic Asides for introducing me to the ghazal. (In the last stanza, I changed my name, Brenda, to Caw. It's a nick I use sometimes in reference to conversations I carry on with crows. ha! One syllable sounded better, and dot com to Caw...you get the picture.)
12 comments:
That's an interesting form - and good on you. Nicely done.
This is so interesting. It is a wonderful day when we learn something new. As Anthony said, "Good on you!" :)
b
http://itcrossedmymindblog.blogspot.com/2010/05/that-is-not-my-mantra-word-clouds.html
hooray for match.com and for your poem - I really enjoyed it!
Thank you Anthony, b, and Alice. Look for more ghazals in the next week or two. Poetic Asides is sponsoring a ghazal a contest. Go check it out and create your own ghazal!
Wonderful poem. And thanks for the back story. Happy anniversary! Bleak intrusive love--I know it well.
wow, that's very interesting. happy anniversary!
Love the feel of this and the sound of it in my head - all the loves at the endings. I have never heard of this form but it is beautiful. Happy anniversary :)
Totally sweet Brenda I am glad you found love!
Pamela
I've never tried a ghazal but it looks like it could be fun. The reference to match.com as "internet yenta" made me chuckle.
whaoooo!!! absolutely creative and you ve nailed it!
Makes of a Melodious Mantra
Hi Brenda, thanks for your visit..there was so much in your piece. Very neatly drawn together and some lovely imagery (I like the idea of 'star-dropped skies'!) Jae
I enjoyed the progressive "-ive" type loves.
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