invisible operative
placed amongst us
gains knowledge
gains access
directs activity
invisible operative
placed amongst us
placed where spirit
gets eaten
feeding
feeding
feeding
on spirit’s demise
human beings
lack access
lack connection
to ancestral wisdom
a spiritual disconnect
spreads
disease
greed
cancers
war
invisible operative
placed amongst us
erases original dreams
breaks being human
the prevalent reality
of the already dead
lacks coherent action
erase pain erase pain erase
a scapegoat to embrace
invisible operative
placed amongst us
masks being
beneath human
feeding
feeding
feeding
on being’s demise
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The Big Tent prompt this week asked writer's to spend time listening to language, and use sound in our poems. John Trudell's words inspired this piece. He is a Santee Sioux. He is an activist. He is a poet. His body houses an extraordinary mind. You tube him. Listen. Give him a chance. Check out Trudell the Movie.
12 comments:
Thought you were talking about Facebook!! Seriously dark imaginings here and sadness.
Derrick- I love the Facebook take on it. It works. Clever thinking. I'm glad you shared that.
Brenda,
I love what you did here.
"on spirit's demise" powerful words
Pamela
Oh! This is a sad one, Brenda ... and hopeless! Well done!
We have met the enemy and it is us. This is a very compelling piece. The repetition gives the demise a sense of inevitability.
"feeding feeding feeding on spirit's demise"
Oh my.
Dark and ominous; just the way I likes 'em.
Dark with premonition. This is insightful and finely tuned!
the repetitions do give it a sense of urgency...and also a feeling of robotic, sequential movement...contemporary realities devouring the humanness
what beautiful poem,
I like the repetition of words..
Happy Saturday!
I'll chime in with what others' said -- Ana's point is so well stated! On a second reading
"erase pain erase pain erase
a scapegoat to embrace"
stood out -- repetition, rhyme, and the robotic rebooting.
A pleasure to read.
Thank you all for your comments.
Pamela-Thank you for your constant kindnesses.
Francis- agreed
Tumblewords..love your words...keep 'em tumbling!
Ana, your comment sums it up well for me. thank you for your insight.
Deb- When I read it aloud, my voice changes to a higher flowing read only for erase pain erase pain erase, then goes back to the more repetitive robotic
Thanks for another great prompt!
lacks access
lacks connection
and later:
lacks cohesive
i like the repeating words and sounds!
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