Feeling short of time, I did these quickly. We are halfway through this month of writing! Spring Break starts for my school district one week from today. Then I can read more of your poems, breathe, and write. Woo hoo!
1
in meditation
the refrigerator runs
shattering silence
2
under nirvana
the refrigerator hums
pulling me back up
3
electricity
runs my refrigerator
its contents run me
4
four haiku rise from
humming refrigerator
must be time to eat
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Thank you to Writer's Island for providing a place to post every day this month, and always on Saturdays.
12 comments:
I'm always impressed by poets who can stay within a rigid structure. Good practice indeed!
This is the first week back from spring break in my school district. I'm finding much less time to read and write for NaPoWriMo.
All good, but No3 stands out.
I agree with Stan about number 3. Shattering silence is lovely - either literally or as an oxymoron.
I like these linked haiku. I'm having a hard time deciding on a favorite. I think they work together well; I like the flow from each stanza to the next.
I'm always ready for writing or reading a haiku! Sometimes, short is all I can do. I love your linked haiku. Who would ever guess a refrigerator could be so entertaining!
It is best to do them quickly.
Nice work.
Love how these haikus interconnect, and who knew a refrigerator could be so interesting. Nicely done, Brenda.
Pamela
Cleverly done, I like the way you kept the 'refrigerator' theme running through all four haiku!
Very nice, but you should have included a fridge.......oh.......wait a minute..............never mind
I like the thread of the refrigerator humming along. I think all of them work s one—so no favorites.
Great sequence of haiku...and oh so true. :) Love these!
they are sort of haunting
these white sentinels
of the kitchen =)
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