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| Smoldering Fires Clarence Holbrook Carter (1904-2000) Columbus Museum of Art |
known is changing
smoke and flame
vent a roiling dance
out the sides of
the beast
and my baby coos
he coos
he is a soother
this one
yellow against the
two fingered fist
that holds our ending
pills we’ll ingest
before we become
invisible
merging with
the searing red flow
the beast could heave
there is no time
to leave
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23 comments:
scary sad and powerful
A compelling, eerie, but somehow touching read....clever work. Thanks for stopping by my blog and commenting. Vb
Compelling beginning and ending... vivid images throughout... I love this:
"yellow against the
two fingered fist
that holds our ending"
~laurie
Thank you Kathe, Vb and Laurie for stopping by and leaving your impressions.
Laurie-When I looked at the bigger picture it seems like she might have something tucked into her hand. That's the image that drove the piece.
~Brenda
A compelling eerie piece. You have penned this one with the master's touch. Great write!
"pills we’ll ingest
before we become
invisible"
That's pretty powerful language.
A chilling prospect.
Has the authentic smell of evil: a stupendous take on the prompt.
yellow against the
two fingered fist
that holds our ending
is what stood out for me.
This poem defiitely has an ominous tone to it!
This is amazing .....
Very vivid imagery in this, Brenda.
Pamela
this is chilling and the imagery is quite powerful.
great work
The frightening inevitability of there being of no other way out of a disastrous situation. Well done.
vivid and direct - an excellent response to the prompt
Brilliant chilling take.
Anna :o]
Good work. Like a hurried note. I like "vent a roiling dance", etc. She does have a grim look, that one, and you took it and ran with it. I have a habit of ignoring the unpleasant.
Hey! Hey! This one has to be in my top 5! A captivating read.
Poignant, gentle with a hard edge. I enjoyed this.
Excellent write.
Love your amazing take on the prompt Brenda....wonderful writing! :-)
Powerful and edgy. Chilling, in fact. Terrific write.
this makes me smile.
happy Belated Mother's Day.
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