02 May 2011

The Beast ~ A Magpie Tale

Smoldering Fires
Clarence Holbrook Carter (1904-2000)

Columbus Museum of Art
everything I’ve ever
known is changing

smoke and flame
vent a roiling dance
out the sides of
the beast
and my baby coos

he coos
he is a soother
this one
yellow against the
two fingered fist
that holds our ending

pills we’ll ingest
before we become
invisible

merging with
the searing red flow
the beast could heave

there is no time
to leave

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23 comments:

Kathe W. said...

scary sad and powerful

versebender said...

A compelling, eerie, but somehow touching read....clever work. Thanks for stopping by my blog and commenting. Vb

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Compelling beginning and ending... vivid images throughout... I love this:

"yellow against the
two fingered fist
that holds our ending"

~laurie

brenda w said...

Thank you Kathe, Vb and Laurie for stopping by and leaving your impressions.

Laurie-When I looked at the bigger picture it seems like she might have something tucked into her hand. That's the image that drove the piece.
~Brenda

Reflections said...

A compelling eerie piece. You have penned this one with the master's touch. Great write!

M. A. S. said...

"pills we’ll ingest
before we become
invisible"

That's pretty powerful language.

Martin H. said...

A chilling prospect.

Dave King said...

Has the authentic smell of evil: a stupendous take on the prompt.

imnotaverse said...

yellow against the
two fingered fist
that holds our ending

is what stood out for me.

Mary said...

This poem defiitely has an ominous tone to it!

Helen said...

This is amazing .....

flaubert said...

Very vivid imagery in this, Brenda.

Pamela

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

this is chilling and the imagery is quite powerful.

great work

Bee's Blog said...

The frightening inevitability of there being of no other way out of a disastrous situation. Well done.

Isabel Doyle said...

vivid and direct - an excellent response to the prompt

HyperCRYPTICal said...

Brilliant chilling take.

Anna :o]

Briarcat said...

Good work. Like a hurried note. I like "vent a roiling dance", etc. She does have a grim look, that one, and you took it and ran with it. I have a habit of ignoring the unpleasant.

Lena said...

Hey! Hey! This one has to be in my top 5! A captivating read.

Liz said...

Poignant, gentle with a hard edge. I enjoyed this.

Steve Isaak said...

Excellent write.

Carrie Burtt said...

Love your amazing take on the prompt Brenda....wonderful writing! :-)

Tumblewords: said...

Powerful and edgy. Chilling, in fact. Terrific write.

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

this makes me smile.
happy Belated Mother's Day.