The Big Tent Poetry prompt this week had poets check back on their previous dozen or so poems and write something different. Metaphor is different for me in two ways. I wrote it with the intention of creating a metaphor for the prompt itself. I also played with the structure of the piece. I don't do a great deal of either. Formatting text for blogger can mystify me so I used my computer's snipping tool to take a picture of the piece and ensure its integrity. (That's how I turned the downside-up, upside-down, too...pictures can be manipulated.)
Through the process, I explored the way I use metaphor in my writing. More often than not they come naturally. To force the process is something I'll try again.
Thanks for the prompt, Deb!
24 comments:
You've got a better computer than mine! I have great difficulting getting words to stay where I want them to be in poems like this. And clever you to think of it... :)
I really enjoyed this piece. I has a rhythm that slides and slithers across the tongue. Fun to read. Made me smile!;)
Very clever, Brenda! How did you manage to flip that one line over? Made me laugh and laugh. And the form looks exactly like a slithering snake! Beautifully done!
Wow, Brenda...this really IS much different than your usual. I love it.
Really really good. I love the slithery form and the rhythm of the piece. I could hear it being called out by two kids jumping rope.
Oh, such a fun piece. Clever girl to manipulate the text like that. In Wordpress, it's as much as I can do to keep the spacing correct.
I really like poems concrètes, and this one is the best I've seen. I salute you.
I'm still smiling!;)
Regards,
DH
I love the visual metaphor in this one. As well as the music of the poem, which "slithers" along with the form. Glad to see the prompt worked so well for you this week. It's not easy to go against one's creative "grain."
Great fun, Brenda and very clever!
Cleverly written! I loved the flow of this piece. Great post!
-Weasel
Super poem Brenda!
A fun read!
Pamela
You must be a very young person to be able to perform these computer
acrobatics! Sigh!
Very creative - I never thought of that... Save as image and upload to blog.
Thanks.
Creative, clever, and just plain fun. It's all been said already, but some things actually bear repeating.
Elizabeth
W00t! Such great style you have here!
ess
ell
eye
see
kay
SLICK!
Very visual. Loved it!
now it is there, now it isn't
I thought this piece was excellent. I love the layout.
I've always admired a poem where the content is emphasized by its form. I've only tried one or two of these myself, and it's not easy to do well. You pulled it off beautifully. I especially like the sense of playfulness, which puts me a bit in mind of ee cummings.
So glad you enjoyed the prompt :-) -- the fun was clear in what you came up with!! I think Francis spoke my own thoughts very well, so ditto him.
What a fun poem! Especially like the spread-out "amuck" and the upside-down "downside up."
BRenda this poem is awesome. your writing inspires me and i gave you an award that is located here:
www.circlingthecuckoosnest.blogspot.com
thanks for sharing your talent!
templeton
Wow! I was out of town for a few days, and stayed away from the computer. Thank you all for your kind comments. It feels good.
wow brenda this is awesome....clever
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