05 August 2010

metaphor























The Big Tent Poetry prompt this week had poets check back on their previous dozen or so poems and write something different.  Metaphor is different for me in two ways.  I wrote it with the intention of creating a metaphor for the prompt itself.  I also played with the structure of the piece.  I don't do a great deal of either.  Formatting text for blogger can mystify me so I used my computer's snipping tool to take a picture of the piece and ensure its integrity.  (That's how I turned the downside-up, upside-down, too...pictures can be manipulated.)

Through the process, I explored the way I use metaphor in my writing.  More often than not they come naturally.  To force the process is something I'll try again.

Thanks for the prompt, Deb!

24 comments:

jinksy said...

You've got a better computer than mine! I have great difficulting getting words to stay where I want them to be in poems like this. And clever you to think of it... :)

Anonymous said...

I really enjoyed this piece. I has a rhythm that slides and slithers across the tongue. Fun to read. Made me smile!;)

Diane T said...

Very clever, Brenda! How did you manage to flip that one line over? Made me laugh and laugh. And the form looks exactly like a slithering snake! Beautifully done!

Mary said...

Wow, Brenda...this really IS much different than your usual. I love it.

Pam said...

Really really good. I love the slithery form and the rhythm of the piece. I could hear it being called out by two kids jumping rope.

vivienne blake said...

Oh, such a fun piece. Clever girl to manipulate the text like that. In Wordpress, it's as much as I can do to keep the spacing correct.

I really like poems concrètes, and this one is the best I've seen. I salute you.

Donald Harbour said...

I'm still smiling!;)
Regards,
DH

alembic said...

I love the visual metaphor in this one. As well as the music of the poem, which "slithers" along with the form. Glad to see the prompt worked so well for you this week. It's not easy to go against one's creative "grain."

Derrick said...

Great fun, Brenda and very clever!

Systematic Weasel said...

Cleverly written! I loved the flow of this piece. Great post!

-Weasel

flaubert said...

Super poem Brenda!
A fun read!
Pamela

rallentanda said...

You must be a very young person to be able to perform these computer
acrobatics! Sigh!

Stan Ski said...

Very creative - I never thought of that... Save as image and upload to blog.
Thanks.

Elizabeth said...

Creative, clever, and just plain fun. It's all been said already, but some things actually bear repeating.

Elizabeth

Tumblewords: said...

W00t! Such great style you have here!

Ron. said...

ess
ell
eye
see
kay

SLICK!

gautami tripathy said...

Very visual. Loved it!


now it is there, now it isn't

Tilly Bud said...

I thought this piece was excellent. I love the layout.

Francis Scudellari said...

I've always admired a poem where the content is emphasized by its form. I've only tried one or two of these myself, and it's not easy to do well. You pulled it off beautifully. I especially like the sense of playfulness, which puts me a bit in mind of ee cummings.

Deb said...

So glad you enjoyed the prompt :-) -- the fun was clear in what you came up with!! I think Francis spoke my own thoughts very well, so ditto him.

Paul Oakley said...

What a fun poem! Especially like the spread-out "amuck" and the upside-down "downside up."

Templeton's fury said...

BRenda this poem is awesome. your writing inspires me and i gave you an award that is located here:
www.circlingthecuckoosnest.blogspot.com

thanks for sharing your talent!
templeton

brenda w said...

Wow! I was out of town for a few days, and stayed away from the computer. Thank you all for your kind comments. It feels good.

hoiden said...

wow brenda this is awesome....clever