silken stream moisten my spirit soften its pineapple thorns plant me naked in baked fields bouldered with broken cars near Juniper’s deep-rooted soul hose the spot make me summer clay shape me into earthen pots render me useful hand blown zeroes whisper infinity, infinity
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This is one of two pieces I wrote for the Big Tent Poetry prompt wordle. Visit the Big Tent link to read some more poems. You'll be glad you did.
I wrote one other piece earlier in the week using this wordle. It's called Huh?
16 comments:
Read as a whisper to me. I loved your connection with the earth...planting you, you becoming summer clay. Very quiet, spiritual feel.
- Dina
I adore hand blown zeros.
I really like:
shape me into earthen pots
render me useful...
A wonderful thought for humans AND non humans alike.
Dina, Wow, thank you.
Willow, The zeroes were hard to work in to the piece. I'm glad you like them.
Mary, Thank you! Glad you like it.
Brenda beautiful use of the words!
It has a wonderful flow
Pamela
baked fields
bouldered with
broken cars
No scrap heap for you, though!
Wistful, Brenda! I like "juniper's deep-roted soul".
A prayer-like meditation filled with wonderful images and ending with blown kisses of ooohhhs. Incredible use of the words. Love it.
Elizabeth
I love 'plant me naked / in baked fields'... and you end up being useful! Delightful poem. Can't wait to read your first one!
I, too, would like being useful.
earthen pots and blown zeros...winter in Montan Hu...thanks for this Brenda
A beautiful poem and wonderful usage with words. :)
Oh! I do like this a lot, especially "plant me naked in baked fields ..."
Terrific voice in this poem.
Love the play between "naked" and "baked." In fact, I was tempted to read baked in two syllables, which has an interesting effect.
I like the way you move from silken stream to baked fields, from zeroes to infinity, from existence to usefulness.
oh, i love how u used the different words.. :) brilliant.. the second verse esp.!
Leo.
Leo's Big Tent Poem
Love - render me useful...great piece and congrat's on blog of the week....bkm
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