tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post845827186799957255..comments2023-10-10T10:41:08.501-06:00Comments on Beyond the Bozone: Trembling Jell-Obrenda whttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-13275129610458655882010-05-20T12:09:29.732-06:002010-05-20T12:09:29.732-06:00Um, wow. Great little rhyming bits and pieces in ...Um, wow. Great little rhyming bits and pieces in there - could almost hear music behind it. Had the feel of a performance art piece - unusual storytelling with a tad of disturbing mixed in the lot.<br /><br />- DinaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-73511933096360785652010-05-19T06:49:42.641-06:002010-05-19T06:49:42.641-06:00@Toi-I'm imagining it in black and white.
@Rol...@Toi-I'm imagining it in black and white.<br />@Roland-Thank you for your comment. I do dapple in some flash fiction--genres definitely meld <br />@Amity-So glad I read comments this morning. You made my day!<br />@gabrielle--I'm right there with you! When I finished writing the piece, a voice in my head said, "Go Lucinda!"brenda whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-4276987812244673922010-05-19T00:34:08.121-06:002010-05-19T00:34:08.121-06:00Lucinda, a proper response if there ever was one.
...Lucinda, a proper response if there ever was one.<br />Disturbing and beautiful piece.gabriellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14488809730387509552noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-21585838368665159252010-05-18T22:59:52.610-06:002010-05-18T22:59:52.610-06:00hmmm...nice...i am in awe!
you write so well Bren...hmmm...nice...i am in awe!<br /><br />you write so well Brenda! keep on...:)Amityhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18222122594130598313noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-63814462822164910032010-05-17T21:07:50.123-06:002010-05-17T21:07:50.123-06:00I've heard of flash fiction, but this reads li...I've heard of flash fiction, but this reads like flash poetry. Excellent, brave post, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-53165237530914134452010-05-17T20:08:54.516-06:002010-05-17T20:08:54.516-06:00love this story - film noir-ish.love this story - film noir-ish.Toihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14412032466394344556noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-80531534726310681742010-05-17T17:22:42.344-06:002010-05-17T17:22:42.344-06:00Thank you all for your comments, I do appreciate t...Thank you all for your comments, I do appreciate them.<br /> <br />SL--I can see the dream sequence, and like that thought. I also appreciate the disgust at the cop's mention of thinness. I had the lady cop do it, as I always got it from my older female relatives. "You need to eat more..."brenda whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-27115775969720091722010-05-17T17:15:28.752-06:002010-05-17T17:15:28.752-06:00Well, it is shocking but probably shockingly true....Well, it is shocking but probably shockingly true. If it did not happen to you, it probably happened to someone somewhere! It is well written.Kathie Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10377224759599266209noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-20170811737070656862010-05-17T16:53:52.319-06:002010-05-17T16:53:52.319-06:00interesting interpretation of the prompt~interesting interpretation of the prompt~Pattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04993186190720192589noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-77150476652050947422010-05-17T09:56:07.396-06:002010-05-17T09:56:07.396-06:00that is original!that is original!Sandra.ifhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07861930312460679629noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-49835922735497680892010-05-17T04:08:14.274-06:002010-05-17T04:08:14.274-06:00how very interesting! :)how very interesting! :)Vinay Leo R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/13132856855570330824noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-39152042269956681692010-05-17T01:23:17.691-06:002010-05-17T01:23:17.691-06:00It has given a full tank of fuel for my imaginatio...It has given a full tank of fuel for my imagination. ;) To me, the piece comes off as a dream sequence. Alternatively, I also 'see' it on stage, as a one-act play.<br /><br />The fifth stanza, now that made me shiver a bit, with the held-back intensity of the threat behind the lines "she thought Lucinda looked thin / and she could always go get more."S.L. Corsuahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10299376651709536034noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-45041316602055600312010-05-16T20:59:38.005-06:002010-05-16T20:59:38.005-06:00Thank you for your comments...I was almost afraid ...Thank you for your comments...I was almost afraid to log back on, because this feels a bit shameful. <br />Tumblewords, thanks for the connection!brenda whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-32009737309816967902010-05-16T19:36:03.380-06:002010-05-16T19:36:03.380-06:00I, too, have no idea where these come from but it ...I, too, have no idea where these come from but it was surely an interesting read, intriguing and strong.Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-78260162977961676152010-05-16T15:17:36.730-06:002010-05-16T15:17:36.730-06:00how charminghow charmingThe Dark Lordhttp://darklordreturns.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8876400310749659322.post-20835247665992793582010-05-16T15:06:43.643-06:002010-05-16T15:06:43.643-06:00An interesting story!An interesting story!SandyCarlsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752798823532580733noreply@blogger.com